RWBY, Oobleck and Zwei were able to get on the train and attempted to stop the train with no brakes. They were putting together their latest plan: A train filled with bombs that will be used to attract the Grimm and lead them to the city of Vale. Turns out, the abandoned city is the hideout where the evil and cunning criminal overlord named Roman Torchwick and the White Fang are residing at. The four young heroes, their teacher and the dog headed to the once-glorious city in the Kingdom of Vale that got overrun by the Grimm and is now a haunted ruin that will forever be called Mountain Glenn. Ruby also brought along her and her sister's black corgi, Zwei. True to the mission's name, they were assigned to search and destroy possible criminal hideouts and to be accompanied by a veteran hunter to support them who turned to be none other than the coffee-drinking, hyperactive, history-of Remnant-obsessed, Doctor Oobleck. Their mission was called "Search and Destroy." Two weeks ago, four very special young huntresses named Ruby Rose, Weiss Schnee, Blake Belladonna and Yang Xiao Long did one of the most dangerous missions they assigned (with a bit of Ozpin's "help") themselves that nearly cost them their lives. But the Grimm and White Fang are two of the many dangers things that forced the four kingdoms to train Man and Faunus alike to combat them. Four kingdoms destined to bring mankind to a greater, harmonious future. All copyright belongs to their respective owners. I hope you understand, and without further ado, let's begin.
I'm going to upload every chapter I can, with better grammar and better writing, in the hopes that not only will old and new readers alike be able to read this creatively-conceived fanfiction, but also for others to see what to do and what NOT to do when writing in general, fanfiction or otherwise. So I took it upon myself to not only re-upload this fanfiction as a form of protest, but polish it.
And that's just scratching the surface on the slipshod writing of the original version. So many run-on sentences, so much cyclical dialogue, so much telling and not enough showing! Seriously, every time they introduce a combat academy in one of the DB episodes, you don't have to have someone say "Like Beacon but without Dust, Aura, and Semblances," or whatever! You can just say "Like Beacon!"Īlso, Yang and arguably Ruby might be exceptions, but I hardly believe that Weiss and Blake would use the word "ain't." Not to mention the gaps in punctuation and the clearly-rushed speed-typing. While I might have problems with other fanfiction vehemently enforcing ships or going against the original creators' intentions, I've no problem with unconventional formats like "commentary-based" fanfiction like this one.īut it's kinda disheartening that the writing was so poor. You can still find it on Wattpad or wherever, but still. It's kind of a shame that the original version got taken down by those stupid Critics United pseudo-mods or whatever.
Prologue - No Address & Episode 1 - Boba Fett VS Samus Aranĭragon's Notes: So. RWBY Watches Death Battle - REMASTERED - A RWBY fanfiction by epicvictory2025, remastered by FireballDragon
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